The Very Final Fantasy Of Hers

[Bootrot]

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that was really beautiful, my mother passed away from cancer when i was 12, so i kind of understand what happens.

it was really depressing but so am i >_> very good work

[Jecide]

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nice poem, its really sad though

[Gorgan]

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Thanks i wish i could be proud of my dark poems if they were not apart of my life....This thought will turn into a memory and it will forever haunt me until i find the 1,but until then i will keep with my sorrowful stories.....Just a thought Im not afraid to die though... another story of ff to cheer our broken down spirits up.The young beast master..if ur guilty listen to this!One day a little hume was playing with his little rabrab friend.He came back everyday to play with his pet he loved soo much.
Posted by Gorgan at 2005-08-09 21:54:25 {Rating}Everytime the rabrab looked into that little boys eyes he felt warm and loved.One day rabrab followed the little boy home,thinking that they were playing a game.The hume was too fast and took off.The rabrab stopped in the woods lost and frightened.
Posted by Gorgan at 2005-08-09 22:12:17 {Rating}rabrab took one bad step and landed into a goblin hole!He couldnt move becuz of the vines that tangeled him.He tried to wriggle out but as he struggled more he became tangled.He had a weak and silent cry that moaned and would say to ppl why who would be this cruel to a cute little rabrab.Except nobody was near enough to hear the small rabrabs cry.about 2 hours later two goblins showed up to check their fallen prey in their hole.They saw the rabrab and grinned an hungry grinn!They stripped the rabrab of his hair and cooked him to a slice of grilled hare!The next day the little boy came to the woods to call for his rabrab friend!*no answer*.The boy searched everyday for his loved rabrab,till everyone told him to give up and your never going to find him.The little boy refused to believe this unfourtunate event.The little boy looked and looked till the end of his days.Author Gorgan:You know thats amazing how sum1 can love a pet for soo long and never let go,just what ecactly made that boy never give up on his loved pet.Well now you can still hear the rabrabs cries and faint shrieks as he was tourched and eaten to his death.
Posted by Gorgan i at 2005-08-09 22:16:40 {Rating}Now tell me what you think of that?If you want to hear the good ending e-mail me if you want to hear the bad ending email me.remember the story is not over yet you can still save the once lost love of the boys and the rabrabs love AND FRIENDSHIP just email me.The story is not over until the writer stops writing. contact me at tra_vo_n@yahoo.com .

Posted by Gorgan at 2005-08-09 22:19:52 {Rating}! ! (^_^) (*_*) THE BOY AND THE RABRAB _______________________
Posted by Gorgan at 2005-08-09 22:28:32 {Rating}If you would like to hear sum mor of my tragic yet saddening stories email me,but if you would rather not want to cry or feel so sorry that you would want to shut off your cumputer.

[Gorgan]

cool

Its a nice storyMan i love ff.too bad it will stop someday.or will it? lol but i wish it could someday be a a helmet and stuff and 3d really moving when ur charachter moves u know.

[Gorgan]

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I doo know how you feel.Lost your love.It seems like theres no purpose to liv without her.Sorry 4 your loss man hope you will have an everlasting love with her in heaven,unless you move on...good luck finding the one.man thats story is

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dont worry we dont think your geeky. just feel like you could do more than write it on paper,like you want to see that person atleast 1 last time b4 forever gone.

It was a long time since the last time I've been here, now I've got the connection to this site at last. First, I want to thank all guys who replied, really appreciate! :-) Well, in fact I'm a cheerful person, the "battery" for all my friends. But most of the time when I tried to write a poem (natural humbleness, I don't say "I wrote poems" ;-) )- it was sad. I've never lost a friend like that, but... I never could imagine how hard it'll be to loose an enemy, so the story's upside down. Not a foe, rival, but true enemy of mine died, the one who wished the death to me, and I felt the same. But when it happened... You can see in the mood of a poem- I felt so sorry.
Geeky- yes, soap opera cries- agree, from how I criticized it's also narrow in expressions, small errors, and in one verse- the stress is incorrect. This all I tried to compensate with emotionality and true feelings I put inside. Ah, what you wanted from a person who cannot pass the TOEFL test? ^^ If I knew English better- I could have done better, I'm working on that. Thank you once again, my fair critics and good luck to you! :-)

[Takemura-san]

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i wish u all good luck in life i think i'll just stay home

[Gorgan]

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wait a munite I just realized!!! Did lovy ever play on Pheonix? I know a mythrian that was called lovvy!I hpe its here.If it isnt then i really feel sorry.To hear a story like that just makes me feel like it wa sall my fault.I wish I could bring her back for you if I was really a whm who I envy so much.Sometimes I wonder what if I...I..I did something to make it better

[silentsteel]

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/sigh, I've read this poem a few times, I kinda found it moving.